P 110
DH Lawrence and using sexualized language when the narrative moves in tight, like ‘oh, yes, oh, soft, I,’
My own twist is to take it in tight to the 1st person, I, just at like the moment of coming
Write ‘blueballs,’ where the guy wants to get laid so bad his balls turned blue
Ambient symbolism
Faulkner
Do not start in media res, he starts on the periphery, like a Simpsons cartoon. With outside characters then moving in to the real characters
Weave in the themes of the story into conclusion in the last paragraph and you have permission to use highly elevated prose at the end of a story or part